--just to figure out exactly what is different about the form.
It's the Japanese tanka format; likely my first conscious exposure to that particular style. (Even my honors English classes /only/ referred to haiku, and no other non-English poetry styles, while spending over a month of classes (as in, six weeks of class blocks) on the sonnet alone.)
So I have been digging and comparing and just /reveling/ in the new form. Thank you for creating an example I would already know and be inclined to like in a form that is more than novel-- it has power and energy of its own, and interacts in new ways with the words it holds.
On the topic, and individual lines-- I think my favorite line is "like a witch counting mustard"... first, because my brain had to jump in with "seeds. Mustard SEEDS,"and it had been pretty much totally sucked into the universe until then. But the 'interruption' wasn't negative, more like catching one's breath.
You've actually done a better job characterizing Natasha here than in the movies. This is someone subtle, but strong in ways that really don't show well in the mega-action movie genre.
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Date: 2014-05-28 04:27 pm (UTC)It's the Japanese tanka format; likely my first conscious exposure to that particular style. (Even my honors English classes /only/ referred to haiku, and no other non-English poetry styles, while spending over a month of classes (as in, six weeks of class blocks) on the sonnet alone.)
So I have been digging and comparing and just /reveling/ in the new form. Thank you for creating an example I would already know and be inclined to like in a form that is more than novel-- it has power and energy of its own, and interacts in new ways with the words it holds.
On the topic, and individual lines-- I think my favorite line is "like a witch counting mustard"... first, because my brain had to jump in with "seeds. Mustard SEEDS,"and it had been pretty much totally sucked into the universe until then. But the 'interruption' wasn't negative, more like catching one's breath.
You've actually done a better job characterizing Natasha here than in the movies. This is someone subtle, but strong in ways that really don't show well in the mega-action movie genre.
Thanks for posting.